Here’s how I did:
Lorrie is only a little like you. She is not at all cool; in fact, she thinks cool is a temperature reading, and when she says “Oh, I just put on whatever old thing’s lying around,” she means “on the floor, where I threw it last night – but I turned the underwear inside out first.” There’s never been anything special about her that she could see; boy, is she in for a surprise. She’s got no emotional scars to speak of. And you’ve been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she’s worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Lorrie, but you’re smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Lorrie is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
Mirror, Mirror: I Love Her, I Let Her Go 5
Beware the Monks of Cool: She’s The Anti-Cool 0
‘Tis Your Destiny: Plain Jane 2
Oh, the Trauma: Healthy as a Horse 2
Momma Loves Me Best: Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 7
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